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[original]Bird without Wings

Lizard@2003-03-04 13:34

Bird without Wings

Little, little deserted bird
Why don't you fly
High into sky?

Crippled bird stands very high
Craving for free, longing for fly
I am a passer-by, seeing you cry
When you raise eyes on those who are in flight

Blue, blue sky
Tell me why --
Why the bird has no wings to fly?

Without wings
She can't fly
Without wings
She can't survive
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Lizard@2003-03-04 13:47

This poem was written during last week, because I am having a poetry studying for this unit now.

It's kind of hard to interpret a poem,hence the class is very boring.
However, when you actually come up with an idea and create a poem, you have a feeling of excitement.^^

Have a try! ~"~v
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Dilemma@2003-03-04 14:21

Ur poem is quite nice ne!!! Tho I spotted some minor grammer mistakes, ur second passage is my fav...
Hehe Good luck wit ur poetry unit~^.^
I dont really enjoy writing poetry cuz im soooo darn lazy!!
But I luv reading the poems from Jeff Hardy. U know who he is? :D
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Lizard@2003-03-04 14:28

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最初由 Dilemma 发布
Ur poem is quite nice ne!!! Tho I spotted some minor grammer mistakes, ur second passage is my fav...
Hehe Good luck wit ur poetry unit~^.^
I dont really enjoy writing poetry cuz im soooo darn lazy!!
But I luv reading the poems from Jeff Hardy. U know who he is? :D


Thanks a lot.^^
Sorry, I m not really into reading~o~..i don't have experience of reading his poems. um..he must be a famous poet~`
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Dilemma@2003-03-04 14:39

HAHAHAHAHA!!!!! No no he aint no poet LOL!!! :P
Jeff Hardy is a WWE superstar la
He is an amazing talent who enjoys writing poetry a lot^^
Dats all... Sorry if I confused you! >.<
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GRACELIAN@2003-03-05 02:29

楼主~的外语~~很好啊 ~~
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Raywell@2003-03-05 07:01

Hi, buddy!
I think ur title is wrong?
"Bird without winds"??
It should be "Bird without wings"
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Lizard@2003-03-06 04:51

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最初由 Dilemma 发布
HAHAHAHAHA!!!!! No no he aint no poet LOL!!! :P
Jeff Hardy is a WWE superstar la
He is an amazing talent who enjoys writing poetry a lot^^
Dats all... Sorry if I confused you! >.<


Oh~ic~
it's ok , caz i don't read a lot:p

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Hi, buddy!Hi, buddy!
I think ur title is wrong?
"Bird without winds"??
It should be "Bird without wings"


Yeh! How can i type it wrong!!?!:mad:
Thanks for telling me^^:p
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Lizard@2003-03-06 04:54

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最初由 GRACELIAN 发布
楼主~的外语~~很好啊 ~~


Nope nope^^
I m not good at it....but thanks anyways:D
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myrion@2003-03-06 10:50

原來這就是可愛蜥蝪妹妹之前詢問英文詩詞課的作品喔~~
好棒好棒~~:):)

可惜偶對這沒什麼研究的說@_@
英文詩詞一樣只要壓同音韻就可以了嗎?_?
老師有沒有教什麼古文字可以用上的~~:):)

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最初由 Dilemma 发布
HAHAHAHAHA!!!!! No no he aint no poet LOL!!! :P
Jeff Hardy is a WWE superstar la
He is an amazing talent who enjoys writing poetry a lot^^
Dats all... Sorry if I confused you! >.<

偶只知道他是個很有名的摔角手 沒想到他也會寫詩?_?
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Dilemma@2003-03-06 21:38

Myrion：4242，他写的诗有SO好的FEEL吖——！

PS：我、我………我是沙加大人命………[死相的LOOK]|||||||||||||||沙加大人——扑！！！！！！！！！>0< [蹭头像 & 签名ING]
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Lizard@2003-03-07 12:19

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最初由 myrion 发布
原來這就是可愛蜥蝪妹妹之前詢問英文詩詞課的作品喔~~
好棒好棒~~:):)

可惜偶對這沒什麼研究的說@_@
英文詩詞一樣只要壓同音韻就可以了嗎?_?
老師有沒有教什麼古文字可以用上的~~:):)


偶只知道他是個很有名的摔角手 沒想到他也會寫詩?_?


hehe..我们在学这个unit的时候,老师就叫我们自己也写吖...
至于语言,也没有深入去教~
呵呵~~我离那个境界还远呢
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Raywell@2003-03-07 15:12

我都只会打油诗，汉............
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myrion@2003-03-08 08:35

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最初由 Dilemma 发布
Myrion：4242，他写的诗有SO好的FEEL吖——！
PS：我、我………我是沙加大人命………[死相的LOOK]|||||||||||||||沙加大人——扑！！！！！！！！！>0< [蹭头像 & 签名ING]

偶倒是不知道 可以告訴偶那裡有他的詩介紹嗎?_?

ps.偶也愛沙加阿 握手握手~~:):)

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最初由 Lizard 发布
hehe..我们在学这个unit的时候,老师就叫我们自己也写吖...
至于语言,也没有深入去教~呵呵~~我离那个境界还远呢

老師很混喔:p:p
不過起碼你們也有基本概念了阿~~
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