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[原创]Roll With Me
dreamswn@2004-07-20 15:02
Roll With Me
I took a walk on the street down to my wonderland.
But I didn’t find my way back.
Then I saw you standing on the sidewalk trying to ignore me.
What am I gonna do to get in your sight?
I ain’t afraid to push limits and to have all kinds of crazy minds.
Come pick me and kiss me.
Coz I ain’t hiding behind the door.
Feel no shame!
I am already a naked soul in front of your eyes.
I’ve got nothing left to show and hide.
Then why would I bother to worry about any pride?
There’s no point and no time to run away now.
I say what I’d say.
I am what I’d be.
I find the key to my brain and let you slip inside
Come roll with me
Don’t just stand aside
Don’t ever denied you also want to know what freedom taste like.
Do what you most feel like.
Never let anything get in your way.
I don’t know which road our lives will drive.
But I have no fears to give it a try.
Life is a game,
So play!
Make it a versatile one and never regret!
July, 20, 2004
钱钱@2004-07-20 15:04
恩，偶昏文啊，哎....
七味@2004-07-20 15:05
原创？写得不错呢~赞~
尤其这句——
Life is a game,
So play!
Lucent Serein@2004-07-20 15:33
我想呢，英文是应该懂得，所以我就用英文来解释。
The main problem would be that the verse is confusing - there are no straight leads into the succeeding lines. However, there's a nice rhythm to the words which reminds me of many songs by the Goo Goo Dolls. I really like some of the phrases and lines, but I feel like some of the grammar could be cleaned up a little. Still, terrific piece.
七味@2004-07-20 15:42
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最初由 Lucent Serein 发布
我想呢，英文是应该懂得，所以我就用英文来解释。
The main problem would be that the verse is confusing - there are no straight leads into the succeeding lines. However, there's a nice rhythm to the words which reminds me of many songs by the Goo Goo Dolls. I really like some of the phrases and lines, but I feel like some of the grammar could be cleaned up a little. Still, terrific piece.
Goo Goo Dolls
这个是？
graywood@2004-07-20 18:35
Goo Goo Dolls
一个乐队！
dreamswn@2004-07-21 01:02
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最初由 Lucent Serein 发布
我想呢，英文是应该懂得，所以我就用英文来解释。
The main problem would be that the verse is confusing - there are no straight leads into the succeeding lines. However, there's a nice rhythm to the words which reminds me of many songs by the Goo Goo Dolls. I really like some of the phrases and lines, but I feel like some of the grammar could be cleaned up a little. Still, terrific piece.
yeah, the verse is not very straight forward.
for grammar, i guess i have been talking like that for too long. and got used to it. can hardly know where it goes wrong. really need to improve it. do u mind to point it out and change it for me?? thx!!
btw, u like goo gool dolls?? so far, i can only rememer one song from them. i think it s called "Iris" (i think it s da theme for "Angel City").
;)
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