About the poem, it sounds really good....very beautiful, just like some lyrics....
but you'd better say"I really want to know what people see in me"..."does"should be omitted here....
However, I don't think your mama should bear the fault. Who gave birth to you so that you can enjoy the wonders of this big world? Who raised you up so that you can have a beautiful body and soul? And who paid for your education and all your other activities so that you can find yourself more integrity and knowledge? ... With all that, how can you blame her for your own grief?
Moreover, why don't you think about all the care and love she gave to you? You're just complaining about your mama's ignorance of your distress, but have you ever cared about her feelings and emotions? Does she ever have a grievance against you? Does she ever ask you to repay her? If your answer is "No", I'd rather say,
please, don't be so self-indulgent...